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  07:05:25  15 February 2009
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odyseus
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Yea, im probably not going to continue this story. I'm no longer in the class where i had so much free time to write it in school, and two of my friends died in a car accident, one of them sat next to me in that class. I remember one time while writing this i turned to him and randomly asked "Should they be attacked or not attacked?" he just sat there confused and said "Not attacked?" so thats what i went with (It was going to be the part in the gabage where Vadik checked the body of the Stalker in the morning whether he would be attacked by the blood sucker or not)
  06:27:24  16 December 2008
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Yes, it will be a while before i get the next part done. Ive been very busy and am still busy. But thanks, yes they are green, that was the whole point when i started. If i wrote about a bunch of teens going into the zone and Pwning everything that would be a bad and unrealistic story and noone would like it.
  11:30:54  13 December 2008
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Odysius i must admit it is a great story youve got there! cant wait for more!!

I tink its cool that you make the story about a group of green rookies!

Keep up the good work
  07:16:49  29 November 2008
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I like it! I can never get enough of good S.T.A.L.K.E.R. fan fictions...................


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  06:17:16  23 November 2008
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_______________After we left the shed we made our way towards the rookie village. We had little idea of where it was, just a direction it may have been in. The soldier had given us a crude map, but it was nothing more than a piece of paper with a few directions on it. All we knew that it was somewhere northwest of our direction. The howling of dogs and the roaring of boars quickened our pace. When we came up to a road, Yurich took a look down the road to check if anyone was near. "You guys, there is a couple soldiers coming this way, lets wait until they turn around to cross the road." Yurich said, "All right but just make sure we cant be seen" i said. When the soldiers finally turned around and walked back towards their outpost we crossed the road silently, "You guys, i see it" Mike proclaimed "its just a little bit more to the West of us." Mike said "All right lets go" Signe said as we started heading towards to rookie village. When we got there the watch asked us something "Why the hell are you here" he said, "The same reason that you're here" Yurich replied, after that he just started laughing as we walked away. We continued to walk down the road until we saw a few Stalkers surrounding a campfire. "HAHAHA, and then the rock flew back and hit him in the head, it was the funniest thing i ever saw." said one Stalker "Oh, man, i wish i would've seen that, it sounds like it was funny as hell." said another. "Hello" one Stalker said to us, "What brings you all to the Zone?" he asked. "We came because we wanted to" said Mike, "Really?" said a Stalker that was standing, looking more experienced than the others possibly because of the Ak 74u he had slung around his back, or it might have been he was the only one wearing an actually Stalker suit, instead of a coat like the rest of the Stalkers. "Most people don't come to the Zone because they want to, its mostly because they have to." he said "Hello" Yurich said "My name is Yurich and these are my friends, Signe, Mike, and Vadik, " Yurich told the Stalker "Greetings, my name is Wolf, I am the leader of this rookie camp, Sidorovich doesn't give a shit about anyone but himself so he doesn't really count." Wolf said. "Hey guys it seems we have a few new rookies" another Stalker yelled down into a cellar. "What do they look like?" a voice came from inside "Shit" the Stalker said back as we heard laughter coming from inside the cellar. "There just looking for something to laugh at" Wolf said, "Sidorovich's office is at the end of the road down in the cellar, just look for a staircase leading far underground." Wolf said "Alright, we'll go there now" Yurich told Wolf as we started walking down the road toward the cellar entrance towards Sidorovich's office.


__________As we walked down the steps towards where Sidorovich's office, the smell Cigarettes and vodka was getting even stronger. When we opened the door to where his office was, we saw a fat balding man with a large mustache sitting down behind a desk typing on a laptop. His office was small, about 10 feet wide, and 10ft tall, and about 20 feet from the door to the opposite wall. There were lockers to our left, and a box to our right, Sidorovich's desk had a lamp on the corner shining on some papers, next to the papers was a radio, beside his desk was a tall wooden filing cabinet with a television on top. Behind Sidorovich was a shelf filled with books, and another wooden filing cabinet with a fan on top of it. Behind the cabinet was another room, separated by a wire wall, and a barred door. The back room was quite dark, but i could see a Groza with a scope in some vice grips. "What the hell do you want" Sidorovich said still looking at the computer, "Hello my name is-" Yurich started to say, but was cut off by the Trader " I don't give a shit who you are, why are you here?" "Well, were looking to buy something" Mike said, the Trader turned and looked at us, "Haha, what are little kids doing in the Zone, run away from you're parents" Sidorovich asked sarcastically "So what do you want to buy" asked the Trader "We need a gun, we only have 500 rubles and we hope that's enough" Yurich said, at that the Trader burst out in laughter "Hahaha, you cant buy shit with 500, you can barely buy a box of pistol ammo" the Trader said. During this whole time i wasn't paying much attention, and was playing with Signe's laser sight and was shinning it all over the Trader's office, "Whats that?" Sidorovich asked "its a laser sight, but we cant use it because we don't have a gun, we also have a scope." Signe said to the Trader, Sidorovich was more interested in the laser sight than the scope. "Hmm" the Trader pondered "If you give me that laser, and you're scope, along with the rest of the money you have, i might give you a Makarov and a few rounds." the Trader said. "Its a deal" Signe said, without even asking us if we should take it. "Great" Sidorovich said, "now let me just get the stuff" as the trader slowly got up out of his chair and moved to the back room, we got out our money and scope from Signe's backpack. We put the laser sight, scope, and money on Sidorovich's desk and he handed us a small pistol with half a box of rounds and an extra clip which Yurich took. Immediately after he handed us the pistol and rounds he picked up the laser sight and started shining it everywhere over his office, "Ha" he said, "I haven't had one of these for a while now." said the Trader as he continued to shine the laser over his office and us. As we started to leave the Trader yelled to us "Hey hang on a minute", we turned around to look back, when Sidorovich shinned the laser into Mike's eye. "Ow, you mother" but was cut off by the Trader's loud roar of laughter. "HAHAHAHA i got you good, now get out of here" yelled the Trader, "He's certainly enjoying himself" Mike said sarcastically covering up his right eye while we were walking up the steps. "It was a little funny" Yurich said, as Mike hit him in the arm.

_____________While we climbed up the stairs, Yurich was looking at the pistol, getting a feel for it, and seeing how it worked. "Does anybody know how to use one of these?" asked Yurich, "I do" I replied and took the pistol from Yurichs hands, "At the store, my boss has one like this, and he taught me how to use it. This is the safety, thats the hammer, and this is the clip." I said, as i pressed the clip release. "This one is a bit older than the one he had, but its about the same." I said. "How many rounds did he give us?" i asked, "About twenty five" Yurich said, looking inside the half filled box of ammunition. "We still need more money so we can all get a gun" Mike said "We'll ask around, and see if anyone has any jobs we can do for some money, or even a gun. At that moment, it started raining. "Lets get somewhere inside where we can talk to some people" Signe said. The outside campfire was almost out as we got to the middle of the rookie village, we saw another light inside a nearby house, so we decided to go there. Inside, there were four Stalkers and Wolf sitting around a fire made inside of a barrel. We all sat down next to the fire and i started to load in bullets into the clips for the pistol. "Hey Wolf you got any missions that we can do?" Yurich asked "No sorry, not at the moment, ill check with Sidorovich tomorrow." Wolf replied.

___________ I finished loading the clips, and put in a full clip into the pistol, "Alright, guys when you put in a new clip, you have to cock it back once, like this" I said, as i cocked back, "Now theres a bullet in the chamber, all you have to do is pull the trigger and it will shoot." i said. I pressed the clip release, and cocked the gun back again, releasing the bullet in the chamber, and pulled the trigger, releasing the hammer. "You only have to cock it back once, and that is if there isn't a bullet in the chamber." I said, then turned on the safety, and put the pistol in my pocket. "Im thirsty" Mike said, "There is a well faucet in the Cellar across the road, but you'll have let it ferment for about half an hour to let the radiation out." Wolf said. "I got some water you can have" Signe said and threw Mike his Canteen.

___________ I got out some dried fruit from my backpack and started eating it as a Stalker walked through the door, holding a sawn off in his hands. "Alright who's next for the watch?" he asked "Hibli is" said Wolf "He hasn't gone for a while, he should be in the house next to the outside fire pit" Wolf said "All right, ill tell him to get his ass up" the Stalker replied, and walked back outside into disappearing in the rain and darkness. "Hey how do you know who's turn it is for watch?" asked Yurich. "We go in turns, i choose who it is, unless they Volunteer. We have two at night, and two during the day, i mostly remember who hasn't gone in a while, and who has." Wolf replied. "Well I'm tired, I'm going to go to sleep" Yurich said, and took out his sleeping bag from his backpack. "Yea i think I'm going to go to sleep also" I said. I also pulled out my sleeping bag out of my backpack, and layed it down in another room to the house, with the doorway facing the fireplace. That night, i slept comfortably, with the rain pounding lightly on the roof, it drowned out the sound of howling from the blind dogs. "Vadik, Vadik wake up" I heard faintly. "Vadik, Vadik" i heard again, then i was kicked in the chest. "Ow what the hell was that for" I yelled "How else would i wake you up" Mike said. "Well thank you for the wake up call" I said sarcastically. I got up and rolled my sleeping bag back up and put it back into my backpack. I got up and walked outside with Mike towards the fire pit, which somehow always seemed like it was lit, night or day. Mike and I sat down near the fire, next to Yurich and Signe. "Its about time you woke up" Signe said, "We've been waiting forever" said Yurich. "So, yesterday i was on watch, i heard you told a funny story" Said a Stalker to another. "Oh, ill tell you it. A few years ago, i was walking in the Garbage with a friend of mine. We were avoiding the giant piles of scraps full of radiation, and we were taking the short way towards the warehouse. My friend was checking for anomolies, by throwing rocks at spots that seemed unsafe. Well, we were almost at the warehouse, when we see this anomoly to our right, it was a Springboard, you know the ones that crush you. Well my friend throws a large rock he had in his pocket in it just for fun. When all of a sudden. Whoosh! Right as the rock went in the anomoly it shot back out and hit him in the head and knocked him over. I fell over laughing until my sides hurt. My friend was so confused at what just happened he just sat there with a dazed look on his face. It was the funniest thing that i ever saw" When the Stalker finished his story, the other Stalker burst out laughing "Oh man, i wish i was there to see that" said the Stalker.After we left the shed we made our way towards the rookie village. We had little idea of where it was, just a direction it may have been in. The soldier had given us a crude map, but it was nothing more than a piece of paper with a few directions on it. All we knew that it was somewhere northwest of our direction. The howling of dogs and the roaring of boars quickened our pace. When we came up to a road, Yurich took a look down the road to check if anyone was near. "You guys, there is a couple soldiers coming this way, lets wait until they turn around to cross the road." Yurich said, "All right but just make sure we cant be seen" i said. When the soldiers finally turned around and walked back towards their outpost we crossed the road silently, "You guys, i see it" Mike proclaimed "its just a little bit more to the West of us." Mike said "All right lets go" Signe said as we started heading towards to rookie village. When we got there the watch asked us something "Why the hell are you here" he said, "The same reason that you're here" Yurich replied, after that he just started laughing as we walked away. We continued to walk down the road until we saw a few Stalkers surrounding a campfire. "HAHAHA, and then the rock flew back and hit him in the head, it was the funniest thing i ever saw." said one Stalker "Oh, man, i wish i would've seen that, it sounds like it was funny as hell." said another. "Hello" one Stalker said to us, "What brings you all to the Zone?" he asked. "We came because we wanted to" said Mike, "Really?" said a Stalker that was standing, looking more experienced than the others possibly because of the Ak 74u he had slung around his back, or it might have been he was the only one wearing an actually Stalker suit, instead of a coat like the rest of the Stalkers. "Most people don't come to the Zone because they want to, its mostly because they have to." he said "Hello" Yurich said "My name is Yurich and these are my friends, Signe, Mike, and Vadik, " Yurich told the Stalker "Greetings, my name is Wolf, I am the leader of this rookie camp, Sidorovich doesn't give a shit about anyone but himself so he doesn't really count." Wolf said. "Hey guys it seems we have a few new rookies" another Stalker yelled down into a cellar. "What do they look like?" a voice came from inside "Shit" the Stalker said back as we heard laughter coming from inside the cellar. "There just looking for something to laugh at" Wolf said, "Sidorovich's office is at the end of the road down in the cellar, just look for a staircase leading far underground." Wolf said "Alright, we'll go there now" Yurich told Wolf as we started walking down the road toward the cellar entrance towards Sidorovich's office.


____________Cigarettes and vodka was getting even stronger. When we opened the door to where his office was, we saw a fat balding man with a large mustache sitting down behind a desk typing on a laptop. His office was small, about 10 feet wide, and 10ft tall, and about 20 feet from the door to the opposite wall. There were lockers to our left, and a box to our right, Sidorovich's desk had a lamp on the corner shining on some papers, next to the papers was a radio, beside his desk was a tall wooden filing cabinet with a television on top. Behind Sidorovich was a shelf filled with books, and another wooden filing cabinet with a fan on top of it. Behind the cabinet was another room, separated by a wire wall, and a barred door. The back room was quite dark, but i could see a Groza with a scope in some vice grips. "What the hell do you want" Sidorovich said still looking at the computer, "Hello my name is-" Yurich started to say, but was cut off by the Trader " I don't give a shit who you are, why are you here?" "Well, were looking to buy something" Mike said, the Trader turned and looked at us, "Haha, what are little kids doing in the Zone, run away from you're parents" Sidorovich asked sarcastically "So what do you want to buy" asked the Trader "We need a gun, we only have 500 rubles and we hope that's enough" Yurich said, at that the Trader burst out in laughter "Hahaha, you cant buy shit with 500, you can barely buy a box of pistol ammo" the Trader said. During this whole time i wasn't paying much attention, and was playing with Signe's laser sight and was shinning it all over the Trader's office, "Whats that?" Sidorovich asked "its a laser sight, but we cant use it because we don't have a gun, we also have a scope." Signe said to the Trader, Sidorovich was more interested in the laser sight than the scope. "Hmm" the Trader pondered "If you give me that laser, and you're scope, along with the rest of the money you have, i might give you a Makarov and a few rounds." the Trader said. "Its a deal" Signe said, without even asking us if we should take it. "Great" Sidorovich said, "now let me just get the stuff" as the trader slowly got up out of his chair and moved to the back room, we got out our money and scope from Signe's backpack. We put the laser sight, scope, and money on Sidorovich's desk and he handed us a small pistol with half a box of rounds and an extra clip which Yurich took. Immediately after he handed us the pistol and rounds he picked up the laser sight and started shining it everywhere over his office, "Ha" he said, "I haven't had one of these for a while now." said the Trader as he continued to shine the laser over his office and us. As we started to leave the Trader yelled to us "Hey hang on a minute", we turned around to look back, when Sidorovich shinned the laser into Mike's eye. "Ow, you mother" but was cut off by the Trader's loud roar of laughter. "HAHAHAHA i got you good, now get out of here" yelled the Trader, "He's certainly enjoying himself" Mike said sarcastically covering up his right eye while we were walking up the steps. "It was a little funny" Yurich said, as Mike hit him in the arm.

___________While we climbed up the stairs, Yurich was looking at the pistol, getting a feel for it, and seeing how it worked. "Does anybody know how to use one of these?" asked Yurich, "I do" I replied and took the pistol from Yurichs hands, "At the store, my boss has one like this, and he taught me how to use it. This is the safety, thats the hammer, and this is the clip." I said, as i pressed the clip release. "This one is a bit older than the one he had, but its about the same." I said. "How many rounds did he give us?" i asked, "About twenty five" Yurich said, looking inside the half filled box of ammunition. "We still need more money so we can all get a gun" Mike said "We'll ask around, and see if anyone has any jobs we can do for some money, or even a gun. At that moment, it started raining. "Lets get somewhere inside where we can talk to some people" Signe said. The outside campfire was almost out as we got to the middle of the rookie village, we saw another light inside a nearby house, so we decided to go there. Inside, there were four Stalkers and Wolf sitting around a fire made inside of a barrel. We all sat down next to the fire and i started to load in bullets into the clips for the pistol. "Hey Wolf you got any missions that we can do?" Yurich asked "No sorry, not at the moment, ill check with Sidorovich tomorrow." Wolf replied.

_________-I finished loading the clips, and put in a full clip into the pistol, "Alright, guys when you put in a new clip, you have to cock it back once, like this" I said, as i cocked back, "Now theres a bullet in the chamber, all you have to do is pull the trigger and it will shoot." i said. I pressed the clip release, and cocked the gun back again, releasing the bullet in the chamber, and pulled the trigger, releasing the hammer. "You only have to cock it back once, and that is if there isn't a bullet in the chamber." I said, then turned on the safety, and put the pistol in my pocket. "Im thirsty" Mike said, "There is a well faucet in the Cellar across the road, but you'll have let it ferment for about half an hour to let the radiation out." Wolf said. "I got some water you can have" Signe said and threw Mike his Canteen.

__________-I got out some dried fruit from my backpack and started eating it as a Stalker walked through the door, holding a sawn off in his hands. "Alright who's next for the watch?" he asked "Hibli is" said Wolf "He hasn't gone for a while, he should be in the house next to the outside fire pit" Wolf said "All right, ill tell him to get his ass up" the Stalker replied, and walked back outside into disappearing in the rain and darkness. "Hey how do you know who's turn it is for watch?" asked Yurich. "We go in turns, i choose who it is, unless they Volunteer. We have two at night, and two during the day, i mostly remember who hasn't gone in a while, and who has." Wolf replied. "Well I'm tired, I'm going to go to sleep" Yurich said, and took out his sleeping bag from his backpack. "Yea i think I'm going to go to sleep also" I said. I also pulled out my sleeping bag out of my backpack, and layed it down in another room to the house, with the doorway facing the fireplace. That night, i slept comfortably, with the rain pounding lightly on the roof, it drowned out the sound of howling from the blind dogs. "Vadik, Vadik wake up" I heard faintly. "Vadik, Vadik" i heard again, then i was kicked in the chest. "Ow what the hell was that for" I yelled "How else would i wake you up" Mike said. "Well thank you for the wake up call" I said sarcastically. I got up and rolled my sleeping bag back up and put it back into my backpack. I got up and walked outside with Mike towards the fire pit, which somehow always seemed like it was lit, night or day. Mike and I sat down near the fire, next to Yurich and Signe. "Its about time you woke up" Signe said, "We've been waiting forever" said Yurich. "So, yesterday i was on watch, i heard you told a funny story" Said a Stalker to another. "Oh, ill tell you it. A few years ago, i was walking in the Garbage with a friend of mine. We were avoiding the giant piles of scraps full of radiation, and we were taking the short way towards the warehouse. My friend was checking for anomolies, by throwing rocks at spots that seemed unsafe. Well, we were almost at the warehouse, when we see this anomoly to our right, it was a Springboard, you know the ones that crush you. Well my friend throws a large rock he had in his pocket in it just for fun. When all of a sudden. Whoosh! Right as the rock went in the anomoly it shot back out and hit him in the head and knocked him over. I fell over laughing until my sides hurt. My friend was so confused at what just happened he just sat there with a dazed look on his face. It was the funniest thing that i ever saw" When the Stalker finished his story, the other Stalker burst out laughing "Oh man, i wish i was there to see that" said the Stalker.
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  02:34:06  10 October 2008
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All right next part is up. Ive been working on this for a while theres even more, but thatl be the next part



________________Back in the Garbage, after the Helicopter flew over us towards Agroprom Seid was getting more and more agitated. "Whats that?" He asked, looking to a lone moving light to his right. "Its probably just some Duty guy from the outpost coming this way for some reason, It doesn't matter, he cant see us, we don't have lights with us." I replied. We watched the light come closer and closer moving sometimes side to side to avoid an anomaly. Whoever it was must have been coming toward this camp because he didn't go towards Agroprom, or the tunnel. Seid couldn't help but keep on looking at the light as it moved closer and closer. "Did you hear that?" Seid asked "I didn't hear anything" i said "Must be the lack of sleep" he said somewhat jokingly.


_______________We watched as the light bent down to pick something up, suddenly it was thrown twenty feet away. "Holy shit did you see that?" Seid said, I was about to reply, but then i saw the light get up and start to run in the opposite direction it was in a few seconds ago, "Jesus Christ" exclaimed Seid as he saw the light run faster, then turn around and start shooting. One loud shotgun blast could be heard coming from the light, "Shouldn't we help?" asked Seid. "How can we help from all the way up here" i replied "Shoot it with you're SKS" he exclaimed "What the fuck am i shooting at i don't know where the hell IT is" i said. As we watched the light keep running backwards, another shotgun blast came, along with a flash of light. We could tell this had hit something, for there was a loud scream a spray of blood that we saw in the ray of light coming from the Stalker. "Shit" said Seid "I knew it was a blood sucker" Seid said, right as we heard a loud scream and the light fell onto the ground not moving. Then we saw as the light still on the ground, was moving slowly like it was being dragged by something. "Let me see that" Seid said, and grabbed my SKS with a scope attached to it. "Hey!" I exclaimed "Hold on man, i just want to kill this blood sucker" Seid pointed out "No, don't, hold on let me...." But it was too late, Seid had already removed the scope caps, turned off the safety and fired just beside the slowly moving light. Two seconds after he fired the light stopped moving.




___________"Did i get it?" asked Seid, "How the hell should i know" i exclaimed as i yanked my rifle out of his hands. "Well the light stopped moving, so i think i might have hit it." Seid said. "I doubt it" i said, "this is a new scope and i haven't even sighted it yet" "Oh shit" Seid said as we heard a loud roar near where the light was laying. "You idiot now it knows where here" I exclaimed "And its probably moving toward us" i said as i put the scope caps back onto my gun. "Watch the entrance" i said, as i ran across the catwalk, jumped over the guard rail onto the other level below, ran down the stairs connecting to the ground level. As i sprinted towards my bag, i could hear Seid yelling at me to hurry up. Once i got to my bag, i pulled out a flare gun, and a sawed off with a few shells. I run back to where Seid is, only a few stories above me, "Seid catch" i yelled as i threw up the flare gun "Got it" Seid yelled "Great, now just shoot it at the entrance to the fence" as soon as i yelled that Seid shot a red ball of flames from the flare gun towards the half open gate of the Fence that surrounded the warehouse. "Good Job" i yelled, "Now tell me if you see any distortions with the light" i exclaimed "All right" he yelled back.

___________When i stood there, watching that pulsing red light for a pair of white eyes, that's the thing about Bloodsuckers, there scary as hell. They used to be human, that was until the Zone was created. Bloodsuckers are probably one of the most dangerous of predators of the Zone, the reason for this is because they have abilities that no other mutant has. They can turn invisible which in dark corridors you can still barely see except for two white eyes, that seem to float towards you until there about four feet in front of you, that's when it turns back to a large humanoid mutant, with four tentacles for a jaw that try to grab you, another thing about bloodsuckers is, that they sometimes but not always, hunt in groups of about four or more. Not only do they hunt in groups, they can set up ambushes, and can plan attacks. Sometimes a Stalker will be occupied trying to shoot one bloodsucker moving across a window, and wont pay attention to his surroundings until its too late. Usually bloodsuckers attack from behind, so they can wrap their tentacles around your neck and throat and paralyze you before they finally suck you're blood out.

_________"Get another flare" Seid yelled down, as the flare was slowly dwindling. It had gone out faster than normal because of the rain "OK" i yelled back, "But only one more, i just have a few left." I ran back to my backpack in the lower level, where the couches are. I grabbed another flare, a bottle of vodka, and my PDA. I hurried up the stairs, and as i walked along the catwalk i looked outside at the flare. It was almost out, so i ran up to where Seid was and handed him the flare. "Thanks" he said, as he took the flare and put it into the flare gun, aimed carefully and fired near the previous flare was. "Did you see anything?" i asked "no, i even looked around with my binoculars and didn't see anything." replied Seid, "good, but we need to tell everyone to be wary tomorrow morning, watch out for bloodsuckers." "tomorrow ill go out and check who it was, if it was a Dutyer we need to tell the outpost." i said. "what else did you bring up, i saw you looking in your bag for something else" Seid asked "Oh just a bottle of Vodka, i don't drink very often and i felt that you might have needed some help with the watch tonight after what happened." i replied "thanks man, now let me have some of that" Seid said as he took the bottle of Vodka from my hands. "This stuff is shit" he said as he looked at the label, "I'm sorrry i didn't have enough time to look at the label while i was being shot at." i replied sarcastically. "Well next time get stuff that's better than this, this is weak" Seid said and took a large swig of vodka, "well then, it may be just the kind for me" i said,"I'm not much into the strong stuff." As i took a small swig of vodka i remembered what had happened once we started heading toward the rookie village in Cordon.
  09:20:55  30 September 2008
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Its better now you've broken it up into paragraphs, story is going well
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Alright, i finally found enough time to write the next part. I will post more sooner than when this one came out because i now realized how fun coming up with ideas this is.

Damn, it says there are indents when im posting it, but when its done, there are none. Sry if i cant get it to work


__________________ As I sat there with Seid while it was raining I remembered our first day in the zone. After the soldier dropped us off near the outpost we followed the fence line until we found a way across. Our dress apparel was separate from each others. Since it was the middle of Fall it was getting quite cold, so we all had packed heavy clothing. I was wearing a dark green German military coat and at 6ft 3 it fit me quite well. Under that I had a sweatshirt above a T-shirt, my pants were hazardous chemical wading pants, beneath those were some old torn jeans i had on for insulation. Mike and Yurich had on coats made by the same company. Which were American made out of heavy material, but Signe had on the oddest apparel. He donned a military grade coat, with a small amount of Kevlar protection, but it was quite cumbersome and had to take breaks more than we did. He also had a belt with a few mag pouches, and a canteen attached. His pants though were flecktarn Bdu pants with jeans underneath.

_____________When we first stepped into the zone we were all very excited and a bit confused, we had no idea of what to do next. So we started looking for a spot to camp for the night since it was getting dark and since we had heard of the dangers of the zone we decided to have night watches once we found a place. After Yurich passed out the headlamps he bought, we all started searching for someplace to sleep. We eventually found a place, a small shack that was probably used to hold some sort of farming machinery. For the guard we switched every four hours and it was Yurich's turn first. As we tried to get some sleep i started to think if this was a bad idea or not, when i heard the distant howl of a dog when we entered the zone, i unbuttoned my machete from its holster, just in case. Signe was out the fastest, since he had on heavier equipment he was quite tired after walking all day. After a few hours of tossing and turning i finally got some sleep. I guess watching Yurich fiddle with his knives all night got a little annoying, every now and then a dog would howl in some distant part of the zone, and he would stop fiddling and start to observer everything that was going on, i also noticed whenever this happened he would grip his knife alot harder. I guess sometime in the night Yurich's turn was over and he woke up Mike for his turn

__________At dawn i had woken up somewhat to the sound of sniffing, i looked over to where Mike was sitting and i guess he didn't hear it, since he was so drowsy he wasn't paying much attention to things, just trying to stay awake. As i listened harder, even more awake fearing that it might be some giant mutant ready to kill us without hesitation. The door to the shed we had closed and placed all our bags against to prevent it from opening during the night. When i saw the door open slightly i was wide awake, and so was Mike. The door slowly started opening more and more as we saw a snout a few feet off the ground start to sniff inside, Then it started to growl, Mike who couldn't possibly hold his knife any tighter was frozen with fear. The door started opening up even more as i saw what appeared to be the head of a dog only without eyes. It was the scariest thing i had ever seen in my life, where the eyes were supposed to be was just skin, the whole entire head looked like it had been burned and the head was missing a cheek so i could see right into its growling mouth. Once the dog's head was inside, it lunged towards Mike who was still frozen, i watched as in a split second mike rolled onto his back and while the dog was still in the air, kicked the dog with both of his feet, suprising the dog as it landed on its back. I shot out of my sleeping bag with my machete in my hand, before i even got to Mike the dog was already up, but since it was paying more attention to me who was standing, that gave enough time for mike to sink his knife into the dogs throat and cut major arteries and tendons and cutting the dogs throat. All of this commotion had woken up Yurich and Signe from their sleep and watched me kick a mutated dog on its side while there was a knife sticking out of the side of its neck, spraying blood around the ground.

_________ After i kicked the dog onto its side, Mike ran to the door and slammed it shut and leaned against it to prevent any other unwelcome guests from coming inside. After explaining somewhat what had happened we decided to eat something. I told Mike to take back his knife while i looked outside to see if it was all clear, i peeked my head outside to check for anything else that would be a threat, nothing was there so i opened the door and as everyone else was getting out of the shack i kicked the dogs body outside as well. We made a small fire right outside the shed with some wood we found laying around. As we all sat around the warm fire that cold morning Yurich noticed an odd distortion of light far away. "I wonder what kind of anomaly that is" he said as we all turned our heads and looked at the odd distortion as well. "Probably a whirlygig" said Mike as he started eating a power bar. "It dosen't matter" Signe commented, "As long as we stay away from it, its not important" said while finishing part of a dried apple. After we ate we put out the fire, although it wouldnt have really mattered if we did or not, it was just a small fire for cooking. We checked our equipment and decided to start off slowly. "Hey man where are we going?" Yurich asked me. Some place that newbie STALKERS go to, there is a trader there named Sidorovich, thats where we can get some more supplies and get started.



Better? Worse? ill try writing shorter paragraphs if its still really bad, there is more to come for those of you that think this is good.
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Damn, its been a while since i posted. Ive been really busy, but ive been getting ideas into my head so i know what im going to write about, should see the next part in a day or two.
 
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