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UltimaGecko
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Just to repoint it out: the story was going to be much longer, but no one seems to want to read a 60 page story (which is why I cut out the dream sequences) - the actual part that is completely typed out is actually the introduction to the main plot and a character introduction.
(the next part of the plot would be hospital assistance for Alina and Sergey, rumors from the zone border station, and the selling of the artifact - which something I'm really mad at myself for at the moment, because I should have included the part of selling it in the submitted paper).
As for the original 'Crystalline Siblings' title, you kind of find that out in the last part of my story, which I assume I have no point in writing anymore (still all noted down though..heh). So I had to rename it - I understand reliable siblings is a retarded name, but I can't have Crystalline Siblings and nothing there to explain it.
Pffft, I just wish more than 4 people read 20 page stories. :
[edit] if you wanted the next part of the story, which includes a bar rumor thing - which is a tiny story in-itself - I can post that here if you want (although I imagine reading on a PDA is...sortof hard).
[edit2] reading over it again, there are some plot points that did get slightly adjusted in the edited version.
[edit3] I know, lots of edits, eh? Except I think I sent in the wrong version, I might have sent in a slightly older version...oh well, not like my writings going to win awards anyway  .
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| 10:56:11 19 March 2004 |
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Amoki
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On forum: 07/31/2003
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Just to repoint it out: the story was going to be much longer, but no one seems to want to read a 60 page story (which is why I cut out the dream sequences) - the actual part that is completely typed out is actually the introduction to the main plot and a character introduction.
(the next part of the plot would be hospital assistance for Alina and Sergey, rumors from the zone border station, and the selling of the artifact - which something I'm really mad at myself for at the moment, because I should have included the part of selling it in the submitted paper).
As for the original 'Crystalline Siblings' title, you kind of find that out in the last part of my story, which I assume I have no point in writing anymore (still all noted down though..heh). So I had to rename it - I understand reliable siblings is a retarded name, but I can't have Crystalline Siblings and nothing there to explain it.
Pffft, I just wish more than 4 people read 20 page stories. :
[edit] if you wanted the next part of the story, which includes a bar rumor thing - which is a tiny story in-itself - I can post that here if you want (although I imagine reading on a PDA is...sortof hard).
[edit2] reading over it again, there are some plot points that did get slightly adjusted in the edited version.
[edit3] I know, lots of edits, eh? Except I think I sent in the wrong version, I might have sent in a slightly older version...oh well, not like my writings going to win awards anyway .
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Kid, (pun intended) I've written and typed more thing then anyone here. Tell me about someone not reading your work. The total pages of things I have written? Let me try to recall from memory. 31 42 52 14 10 18 20 23 32 = around 280pages of work. Despite so... let's say I am determined to give any work my fair share of reading, but since your not in time to submit them, don't worry too much about it. My point is that the story seem crippled in its current state, and to be honest, I don't think you havethe energy to continue that far. Despite so... I must congratulate you for 'thinking outside the box'- you manage to doa far more better job. If you had started one year earlier, you might have ended up being One of the Big Things (or stories) that I have been waiting for.
By the way, 14 10 18 20 23 32 belongs to my story posted in the forum- the Prey of One, Predator of another series. The one you would be seeing (if you did) would be the uncondensed version, and my, its a lot, that sometimes when I reread it (why, I think I already reread it like 7 times, starting to get bored  ) it did felt like a drag to an archivement. But that's what happen when you intended to try to put everything in perspective and spelled it out to the reader. To put in quality, length have to suffice, unless you are a great storyteller like Midnight Rambler AND especially Ian_C, and I am not bragging. Their stories are the ones which are really good for me. But hope mine wins.
P.S- the one I am talking about is paperback- the books I am reading mostly are from the library. My school is like a 25-minute walk from home, so it coudl be quite a drag, especially when you have to walk in leather shoes.
P.S 2- No, its not kind of hard to read on MINE PDA. Mine is a Sony Clie NX80V, a costly 'toy' which so fars is everything I need save for a phone. I use a program call Mobipocket to read which I can use my big screen to adjust to fonts suitable for my reading, so don't worry about me reading from there- program conversation only tak about less then 5 minutes at the most.
P.S 3- my, oh, my, I am currently doing my tenth work- its call "Home to stay", something to kill time and not intended for the competition. Add the Page list to around 290. hehheh 
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We fight our countrys battles In the air', on land, and sea.
First to fight for right and freedom , And to keep our honor clean,
We are proud to claim the title Of United States Marines.
Our flags unfurl'd to every breeze From dawn to setting sun';
We have fought in every clime and place Where we could take a gun.
In the snow of far-off northern lands And in sunny tropic scenes,
You will find us always on the job - The United States Marines.
Here's health to you and to our Corps Which we are proud to serve;
In many a strife we've fought for life And never lost our nerve.
If the Army and the Navy Ever gaze on Heaven's scenes,
They will find the streets are guarded By United States Marines. - US Marines Hymn
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| 11:03:32 19 March 2004 |
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Amoki
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On forum: 07/31/2003
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oh yeah, before I forget- there's a way to correct your problem. Because we don't have the faintest idea whether :1) GSC receive them 2) GSC delete them directly from inbox 3) GSC pretends to receive them and delete them while screaming "Serve 'im right!" and 4) GSC haven't open their mail at all, this is the best suggestion I can give you so far
1) Mail them using the official address, titled Ammendments to (title)
2) write a polite letter and tell them briefly about your situation (while threatenign to not to buy their game if they don't respond. haha, me and my sense of humor )
3) Ask them to delete their version of your files, and replace them with your new ones
4) thank them, and tell them have a nice day, because they are not while frantically trying to desgin the game
Do not complicate the process. Bear in mind that you are way late for the contest, and that they are busy people. Keep things as brief as possible, and make sure the process is like "delete, transfer, done." Of course, we have no way of knowing if theyt have to translate them or something.
Great, independant Iraq War journalism: http://michaelyon.blogspot.com/
From the halls of Montezuma To the shores of Tripoli'
We fight our countrys battles In the air', on land, and sea.
First to fight for right and freedom , And to keep our honor clean,
We are proud to claim the title Of United States Marines.
Our flags unfurl'd to every breeze From dawn to setting sun';
We have fought in every clime and place Where we could take a gun.
In the snow of far-off northern lands And in sunny tropic scenes,
You will find us always on the job - The United States Marines.
Here's health to you and to our Corps Which we are proud to serve;
In many a strife we've fought for life And never lost our nerve.
If the Army and the Navy Ever gaze on Heaven's scenes,
They will find the streets are guarded By United States Marines. - US Marines Hymn
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| 23:00:35 22 April 2004 |
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UltimaGecko
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On forum: 01/28/2004
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04/22/2004 23:02:55
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Crystalline Siblings: A Moment of Peace
Gotta pump out around another 15 pages (if all goes according to my plan) by the 26th. Should work out, I'll send it out Sunday night if I can, to be sure (although there is that whole timezone thing...).
amoki's probably the only one that might read it, but hey, if I've got more of the story, I should post it in my thread, right? Few questions, for people, for realistic writing:
What monetary unit is used within the zone area, Russia uses the rouble (ruble, if you want), but as far as I know, Ukraine uses the hyrvnia...but I've not seen a story that uses it...it's always roubles. So...yea, which one should I be using here?
Note that some parts from the above story parts has been minorly changed/deleted (especially the corny ending, which was there only to end it, and was poorly done - I apologize ).
Feel free to respond (everyone's probably busy writing, ):
[part from Crystalline Siblings: Reliable Siblings Part 4]
She was shaken. Her body was rocking back and forth. The light was bright, she squinted. Her eyes adjusted, and then she felt the throbbing in her leg and groaned.
Sergey tapped Erwin,
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| 06:22:39 23 April 2004 |
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Amoki
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On forum: 07/31/2003
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I'm flattered to know that people do think that I read their work
Yup- it's still good. But DO MAIL TO ATEM (see his profile and get address) AND ASK HIM WHETHER IT IS STILL GOOD TO MAIL! I put this in Caps because it is very, very important. You might not want to see you after typing all the things and got rejected because atem is hnot taking in things anymore. Whi;e you do this, please ask for the sake of 1) me (yes, I am still sweating one I called my own. Well, not exactly, the tenth of my own  ) 2) Ian C 3) Grisly Silence and 4) some other guys who are still doing it.
After you get the reply, it is very imperative you sent the reply to us. As GSC's PR is very, very good, don't worry about your email being received. But do ask Atem to post a reply at the forum- tell him a lot of people in the forum is waiting for the answer.
P.S- According to my PDA, it is 9.02am in Kiev now- theoritically Atem is opening his mailbox now. I might as well sent it myself.
Great, independant Iraq War journalism: http://michaelyon.blogspot.com/
From the halls of Montezuma To the shores of Tripoli'
We fight our countrys battles In the air', on land, and sea.
First to fight for right and freedom , And to keep our honor clean,
We are proud to claim the title Of United States Marines.
Our flags unfurl'd to every breeze From dawn to setting sun';
We have fought in every clime and place Where we could take a gun.
In the snow of far-off northern lands And in sunny tropic scenes,
You will find us always on the job - The United States Marines.
Here's health to you and to our Corps Which we are proud to serve;
In many a strife we've fought for life And never lost our nerve.
If the Army and the Navy Ever gaze on Heaven's scenes,
They will find the streets are guarded By United States Marines. - US Marines Hymn
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