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  21:23:12  9 July 2005
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Kyton
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NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Guess what, I was writing a long-ass story and wasting a good deal of effort on it, then I accidentally hit the numlock key and erased the whole thing!!! goddammit!!!!!!!! three hours for nothing!!!!!!!!!!!!11
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I know how ya feel dawg... done that with an essay :
  19:53:01  9 July 2005
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NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Guess what, I was writing a long-ass story and wasting a good deal of effort on it, then I accidentally hit the numlock key and erased the whole thing!!! goddammit!!!!!!!! three hours for nothing!!!!!!!!!!!!11
  19:05:38  9 July 2005
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My turn!

The horrible day

A veteran stalker was walking down the street,when he heard something suspicious from the building nearby. He continued to investigate, only to find a group of zombies feasting on fine swiss chee...sorry... the flesh of another stalker. This situation required the stalker to use his Über1337ultramegazombiefromouterspaceninjaskillz. After leaving that horrid scene, he continued walking the streets, downtown as his destination. He was stopped again... by a cute blind dog puppy...well it was cute what was left of it,so he closed in to pet it. As his hand drew closer, he felt a warm sensation in his leg! (no! the puppy is not humping his leg!) The puppy was peeing on his leg...and it wasnt normal pee, but uranium filled pee of death! he could feel his leg slowly dissolving and he started to scream!

This scream woke the bloodsucker nearby and he was there in a minute, the stalker knew that this was the end... so he took his bottle of Pinot Noir 1867 and he drank it faster than you can say "a blind dog puppy peed on my leg!"
So, the bloodsucker was getting closer and closer and closer... until it poked him on the shoulder and let out a sound that sounded like "yOuRe It!" it seemed like the bloodsucker wanted to play with him.
The stalker was fascinated of the newfound discovery , that bloodsuckers are intelligent...until the bloodsucker said:" Me TaRzAn, YoU JaNe!" and took the stalker in his nest for...

*we interrupt this story because of too perverted material is ahead.... stand by* after escaping the grasp of the loony bloodsucker... he started crawling towards downtown. Finally he got there 5 hours later, and he found a piece of paper which said: "We had to leave! theres a massive Poison fog coming straight towards the downtown! kthxbye!" now what did we learn from this? Never... and i do mean NEVER go check out weird sounds and pet a blind dog puppy! oh yeah, it is wise to avoid nutty Bloodsuckers too! kthxbye!

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And Amoki, dont even start! i made this story purely from my own twisted imagination!
  18:11:10  9 July 2005
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LOL, amoki reviewing this story seriously is like calling Scary Movie 3 an actual horror movie.
  05:49:51  20 June 2005
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Amoki
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I cannot find it now (I've been looking passively for quite some time), but he said in another thread that he was going to make a place for less serious stories. If I recall correctly, this current thread was moved from somewhere else.
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LOL, wrong guy, wrong place, wrong time.
  05:43:27  20 June 2005
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I cannot find it now (I've been looking passively for quite some time), but he said in another thread that he was going to make a place for less serious stories. If I recall correctly, this current thread was moved from somewhere else.
  03:49:40  20 June 2005
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Amoki
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Amoki

I believe that this story was supposed to be silly. I do not know if the author's immediate intention was to lampoon or satire stalker and its world, or just to be silly or weird, but I think that your criticism is not constructive in that you are grading a MAD magazine as if it was War and Peace.
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Well, you used the word "silly" yourself, not me . However, on my part I do not find any sort of evidence to suggest that the story was meant to be satire/funny at all, perhaps maybe the smiley (which happens to be the relatively few times I have ever encounted a smiley in a fanfiction ). The story has all the features that you can find in an amateur action fanfiction (and I have pointed this out) which I have encountered countless time beforehand . And it is not as if I have never seen a satirical STALKER fanfiction beforehand to not to know when I read one... but still, I'm open to suggestion or dispute from another fellow member. I may be wrong.

And yes - I might have overkill a little bit, but the other 2 alternative is to go for songs and praises, which I find overtly pretentious of course, or complete silence, which what happened in the Russian literary contest forum literally. (heh, last time I check their newest thread was made in January 2004 ). However, also notice that I haven't been brutally honest.
  01:23:28  20 June 2005
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Amoki

I believe that this story was supposed to be silly. I do not know if the author's immediate intention was to lampoon or satire stalker and its world, or just to be silly or weird, but I think that your criticism is not constructive in that you are grading a MAD magazine as if it was War and Peace.
  00:55:54  20 June 2005
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Amoki
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Oh well, guess it is up to me... and it ain't pretty:

1) cliche - lots of them. If English isn't your first language, cliche refers to immediate asumptions on certain matters that you have not researched in. First of all : C4 is a complex explosives- not easily taken care of no manufactured. and for some funny reasons your STALKER characters seems to have uncovered one find in a house. Eh? Even in the best of luck, you should be looking at Semtex - Czech-made, within the Soviet Bloc (STALKER is based in the Soviet era, alternative history). My immediate impression is that you've played too much Counter-Strike - not good for writing fan-fiction. And before I forget - someone having all that nice explosives letting it loose in the Zone? Also, why would anyone carry 2 primary weapons as a back-up? A well-cleaned and well-maintained weapon seldom jammed. And have you ever run around with an extra 3 kilos (which is about the weight of an extra primary weapon) of dead weight in your school-bag? Well, if you're in the Zone - if your survival is dependant on your speed and your speed depends on your weight, you'll try to cut off as much weight as you can.

2) You identify a military stalker by the suit they are wearing. Since the suit is removed, how do you know the dead body was a military stalker? And not eaten by any mutant?

3) You don't have a direction while you're writing this story - a lot of bang, a lot of shouts, a lot of action... but nothing worthwhile. No plot, just dumb-ass shooting action, if anything else. Yes, it's fanfiction all right, but not the type I'm singing praises of.

4) HK P99 and LR 300 happens to be very expensive weapon. May I ask why your stalker is stil staying in the Zone? Looking for a little adventure? This leads me to my next point - characterization. Your characters ain't going places, he's just a stalker with nice explosives and nice guns. No family? No background? No point of being a stalker? Being a stalker is dangerous - it's like asking you to rob a bank, every day. You tend to quit as soon as possible to keep your life.

5) Yuri = ultra-generic name. Not everyone in Russian/CIS is called Yuri. It's like having everyone in every story book you have read "John".


It's your first work, I know it. However, don't worry too much. Harsh as these comments may be, heck, everyone have to start somewhere. I've been screwed all over when I started 3 years ago. It's just that I've been reviewing amateur fan-fiction over and over and over again, gets furstrating sometimes.

However, worth commending is your spoon-off grenade-and-string as defence - nice material, haven't seen anyone within the STALKER community using it before. Kinda remind me of The Punisher (movie).

P.S - Grisly, not doing your work anymore?
  09:47:17  18 June 2005
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Amoki
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Mano, I rather have Grisly Silence or the others comment on this.
 
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