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  10:55:56  2 January 2006
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Siro
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THIS IS SO CONFUSING!!

So the top 25 will be from the site first, then you will take some from the forum and replace the lackluster ones with the ones from the forum or something?

And being a moderator of the Literary contest, which is supposed to be unbiased and give a fair chance to everyone, what gives you the right to help somebody out more that everyone else in the contest?
  15:55:24  1 January 2006
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Ian_C
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All stories will be included on the DVD AFAIK, but as you say only the top 25 will be rewarded.

As for how to be sure that yours ( and others posted on this forum ) are included, I believe Amoki is working on that right now. Just keep an eye on this forum for updates, I'm sure an official announcement will be made once things become clear.
  00:52:11  1 January 2006
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SoulThief
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I don't want to whine or such,

But how does the contest work?

Because i would love if my story was taken in maybe If i would get 25 and no price at all, It would just be sooo cool to see my story on the DVD.

Wheter i bought or won it.

How do i make it so that it get's reviewed and included.
Sorry if i Plain missed something, but i just wanted to add my question.


Thanks in advance
  23:52:52  30 December 2005
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Amoki
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So the top 25 comes only from the site? So all the stories on the forum are just there to decorate the forum? Such a shame.
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Not quite. As you will soon see there will be more stories to come if my tricks work...
  13:49:26  30 December 2005
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So the top 25 comes only from the site? So all the stories on the forum are just there to decorate the forum? Such a shame.
  01:20:59  30 December 2005
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Amoki
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No idea what you mean. So only stories on the site will be the finalists?! Your list is confusing.

Some stories are also pretty bad, but they still made it in thefinalists. No idea why. Please go on MSN more often so I could talk to you about this!!!
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*sigh*

This is a personal list that I've made by myself with the cooperation of another forum member. You should be looking at the top 25, not the finalist (which is only a guide to what story to read if you don't want to wade through all the stories).

Some of the storeis in the "finalist" pool is mediocre, I admit: but you shouldn't find any such story in the the top 25 (which is essentially what Oleg Y will be looking at soon)
  21:33:04  29 December 2005
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No idea what you mean. So only stories on the site will be the finalists?! Your list is confusing.

Some stories are also pretty bad, but they still made it in thefinalists. No idea why. Please go on MSN more often so I could talk to you about this!!!
  03:34:47  28 December 2005
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Amoki
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Which bring us to the all-importatnt Verrdict 2 now that it's what stands between proving the website voting as lousy and proving it as downright failure....

Anyone with WHATSOEVER story in the top 20? It is extremely vital any ammendment be done with in 24 hours time since Oleg Yavorsky is going to read thorugh them faster than a Kansas Tornado...
  20:00:23  29 December 2004
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Amoki
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Due to the recent interview, The Verdict V.2 WILL undergo a major turn-around. Setting is now skipped. Allow a few weeks to turn this place around.

And oh, Fraz - I'll endorse your story this time
  09:47:27  23 December 2004
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(10) Narrow House
genre – adventure?
plot – how somebody became a (military) stalker

review – The first of top ten. You can expect some interesting qualities this story has.

First of all – a brand-new squeaky-clean plot that no one ever encounter before. Yum – interesting story to read, I must say. It is somewhat hard to believe that this story did actually ends with the main hero becomes a stalker, but that’s the way the author plans to do it, and that’s the way the author ends up with.

The writing style is beautiful. Very fluid narration and description of the whole thing. The author truly has a good command of English in the sense that he is able to construct every sentence into something no-so-common entirely. Almost every sentence is beautifully written, and all of it acts as the story’s attractant. Not that I am gay or something, but that is the case. Definitely a big hit for its style. As for characterization, the author didn’t do so well on that. Just basics, nothing much

Now onto the flaws… oh com’on, I hate it too. First of all… the Zone is too large in his story. WAY too large. The radius of The Zone expanded to Bila Tserka? (Well, I learnt my Ukrainian Geography while writing “home to stay”). The Zone is only 30 square kilometre, meaning that the radius should be around 5.5km only. Not 55 km.

The character living INSIDE The Zone? Again, that is way too much. We don’t know what he does for a living, and since he is not a stalker it really tickles you when you try to imagine what is in the head of the author. No, unacceptable in my standard. The Zone is supposed to be a dangerous place, and no one could live inside it with a hunting rifle and living a true loner’s life. No, no, no. And also the part when a military stalker picks up the belongings of the character’s dead brother who happens to be a stalker… since when military stalker mangle with stalkers, the illegal goons?

Overall, if you ignore the setting, the story would have been fine. You might like it, but who knows?

Note- setting might have stray a little bit, but not too far, so I didn’t penalize it too much.

overall rating
Plot - 3/5 - Actually goes quite well, though I hate the way the story was ended
style - 4.5/5 - very unique writing style - really good.
characterization - 4/5 - Very deep, character has realistic emotions, characters' thoughts fully expressed.
setting - 2/5 - Fragged. Too much error.


What others had said:
[author no.2] - Deepness of the tale reveals itself istantly: '' Efiv Korsakov was born in the troubling year of 1988 on the west side of Kiev'' and this is adirect attempt to reveal the will of making a deep characterization and development of the people involved, making a effort in the past.I would like consider it a plus in a game where still the stalkers are anonimous and nothing is revealed about how much we will know about them in the retail version of the game.This means that making an effort to build a 360 degrees character is what immedialtely gives deepness to the tale but also to the game presentation (as this also explains the recent will of GSC of inculding biographies of tales' characters in the game).The deepness of this decision is well constructed on the events with a good use of the forms.


1) D. A fine story with great depth. An excellent choice for this game. I enjoyed the scope of the story and how it was not limited to a set frame work. One could dive into the world and let the imagination explore various avenues of thought. Well done.
2) Barbara Miller - Greg, you do an excellent job with mood and state of mind. A very dark story, but then the zone is a very dark place. Like Amoki, you put in a lot of work writing your story, which is longer than both of mine put together. Good story.

Link - http://www.stalker-game.com/index.php?t=community&s=contest&ss=rating&id=135


(9) A Blind Dog
Story genre – narrative
Plot – unsummarizable

Story review- now this is the kind of story that puts a smile on your face. A big one.

There is no direct plot. Maybe a simple one that is near non-existent. But what is so different about it, is that it is about the life of a blind dog. This is the classic example of ‘thinking outside the box can help you win’. The narrative is very, very creative- in fact, you need to ponder for well before you know what the author is talking about, and from there on everything is more than interesting to read. It is about the life of a Blind Dog, its pup and its partner, and lifestyle and so forth. Interesting story, interesting story. Definitely a must-read, although the plot will not be as engaging as those up in the front.

This story has no plot – basically, I cannot do much comment on it, or the loopholes. But the lack of an engaging plot forces me to land this story at this position. And the story’s position isn’t that bad after all! Basically, plot is only the problem with this story because it is over-simplistic, and that’s it. There is no other problem with this story.

Overall, a very interesting read… well, definitely will put that giggle onto you. Recommended.

Overall rating:
-Plot - 3/5 - interesting read. Very interesting .
-characterization - 5/5 - characterizing a doggy...
-style - 4/5 - l like his plain but straight-to-the-point 1st person point of view. Also, interestingly, he substituted Zone Character terms with those crpytic words that should really be what dogs think (Tall ones = humans)
-setting - 3/5 - above average. Typical zone setting, but from the viewpoint of a Blind Dog.


Note - author claimed that the work was translated.

What others had said:
1) Max - I love the dogs viewpoint of things.... mmm canned meat
2) Barbara Miller - I liked your story. Very original !
3) Zveroboy[UK] - Great story, lots of details, and *very* original!

Link - http://www.stalker-game.com/index.php?t=community&s=contest&ss=rating&id=14


(8) No escape
genre – stalker adventure
plot – life of a underdog stalker in The Zone
review – you can make a decision yourself once you see the plot summary. This story is creative, and a great break – it features an antihero!

No doubt, by now you HAVE to realise that most stories being in the top ten must have something that stands out… something unique that no other stories can imitate. Perks. Quirks, however you put it. Antihero is some of the rarest feature in the contest, because almost every author loves good heroes. Well, here you go – creative story!

Seriously… I like this idea, a scavenger stalker. The whole plot is probably driven by this guy, and that is probably enough. It is intriguing enough to see how such stalker survive in the field, and this also happens to be a masochist too. Interesting stuff. Also, there is some sort of tension present along the way, with the way how the author writes down what happened, when it happens and how, and works his story in a “cause and result” way.

Characterization is, of course, good. Underdog stalker… now, who could have thought of that? Basically the centre point of the story is the character itself- applause from me

However, not all things are great about this story. Plot value, for one, is low. Basically, the plot is too simple, although its simplicity should keep you engrossed during the entire length. Also, the plotline is somewhat generic – kill or be killed, that’s all. Most stories, up to this point, utilized this save for some very special examples.

Sure, it is in the top ten, but there is still room for improvement. Overall, should be an enjoyable length, considering its speciality and its length. Worthy for his ranking.

Personal note- contain unhealthy amount of violence. Reader's discretion advised.

overall rating:
-plot - 4/5 -unique - underdog stalker, who could have thought of that
- characterization 3.5/5 - Very violent characters, successfully portrayed characters as greedy *bastards* and dog-eat-dog situation
- style - 3.5/5 - Very easy to get onto it, good tension, very fluid..
-setting - 2.5/5 - Typical.


What others had said:
1) Great story best one ive read. Good luck with the contest.

Link - http://www.stalker-game.com/index.php?t=community&s=contest&ss=rating&id=138


(7) Remember
Story genre – surreal stalker adventure
Plot – a stalker from Chernobyl (he evacuated, and backs in) investigate a phenomenon that looked like his sister…
Review- Straight up, the finger from me. Thumb, of course.

This is short and sweet too, like its previous counterpart. However, this one packs more punch – a more solid plot, a more plot-orientated tension (instead of action orientated like “Through the eyes of a sniper”), and more surreal. You can’t get around it, and this completely fits the Zone’s description. I like it, and I like it a lot. And in the end, you have to read it a couple more times before you know what is going on in the end. Great piece of mystery I must say.

Also, the writer writes with style – smooth flow of language, and this time, a clear focus. He clearly knows what he wants to write, and how to write it.

Sadly… no, not bad points analysis. This is as good as its get beyond the top ten. Every story is packed solid, and every story is considered best among the best. The human aspect and characterization of this story is weaker compare to the others – I can’t see the difference between his characters, and most other characters in the other stories are either of the same standard but better plot value, or they did it better. Too bad. But at this place, I don’t think there is much to ask. Consider yourself the best, Chris, you’ve earn it.

overall rating
- plot - 3.5/5 - Was above average, substiture tension with curiosity as plot driver (not really common)
- characterization 3.5/5- Was good - quite thorough character history, but personally yearn for more though
-style - 3.5 - good, mysterious, tone.
- setting - 3.5/5 - above-average. Got the sense of Zone mystery.


What others had said:
1) ChanSD5 - This is simply one of the best and most memorable stories I have read here. Wow, Chris, you sure could write really really well. I hope you do more stories in the stalker setting. My new story, Geneva, will be posted soon, and I feel that your writing style is very similar to mine, so if you get a chance, read it when GSC posts it.
2) Franz La Zerte -
Hey Chris. I liked this story much better then yuor other one. This one is alot more unique, and theres some underlying character in Taras, which is nice to see in short stories. Many simply have a nameless badass kill stuff in the zone, and either emerge victorious or die trying. The whole thing with the lady was mysterious, and intriguing, I just wished I could have known more about her. Maybe you designed it so Im not supposed to know, or maybe I should be able to guess... but I just felt certain parts of the plot were a bit unclear. (It would have been nice if the character Kostya, who you took such pains to introduce in the beginning, had some part to play later on. His lack of role in the climax seemed a little puzzling, but thats just my opinion.) But good job on describing someone with emotions and feelings. A refreshing change to read about someone who actually appears to be human .
3) Reg LeCripsp - Quite good. Injects the Zone with a thoughtful dose of high weirdness which is sorely missed in the regretfully typical 'zombies/shootouts meet even more zombies/more shootouts' offerings found here.
4) E- Beautiful and tragic. Nice use of imagery in the opening few paragraphs. There was a real humanity behind the writing.

Link: - http://www.stalker-game.com/index.php?t=community&s=contest&ss=rating&id=155


(6)Pilgrimage, Part 1
genre – stalker survival
plot – a stalker uncover a site potential to be what caused The Zone to occur (research facility), and have to escape to survive.

Review – Now this is a great story too, a potential one that is.

This author got class. I have to admit, this is a pretty rare gem too. Let’s start from the plot – while from the first glance you might get the impression that it is generic, well, it is generic with a twist. The stalker was actually going into a fully-guarded facility, not an abandoned one. You will pretty much get the impression that this is a spicy fanfic after that. Definitely earn my thumb for plot. Also, you will catch on with the suspenseful mood of the story fast – this is a fast paced fanfic, and fast paced it is. You will earn for more from this author.

The style that this story is written is pretty worthwhile too. Great and fluid description (how many times have I used this?) right from the beginning. The author writes down every single single detail, fine-tuned them, and put them in the story… all without causing boredom in the readers. Definitely sweet. It is quite rare, again, to find such story.

Characterization is only above-standard. Main character is slightly special, as a Eastern European. But that’s it.

Basically, this story is near-perfect… accept for one thing – unfinished. I would have given this story a higher rating, maybe even for position no.3 or no.4… if the author finished the story. Problem is, he hasn’t, and there are 23 stories in this top 25 that has a proper ending of some sort. No, I cannot accept the fact that it shouldn’t be penalize just because the author didn’t finish it. A story that is not finished is not a story at all. What has a beginning, must have an end too.

Oeverall? Should have been a top fanfic if it was completed, but don’t let that stop you from enjoying this fine piece of writing.

overall rating:
- plot - 3.5/5 - excellent, very tensed development, only failure is failure to complete the story.
- characteriztion - 3/5 - above-average, but not that good - just filled in the history, nothing special.
- style - 4/5 - very tense ,mysterious (about the part where he found the special body (?) , very well-descripted and well-narrated action
- setting - 3.5/4 - use abandoned research facility as a background


What others had said:
[author no.2] - A Personal View: This story has two diffferent, opposite sides.While the form is well constructed, the choice of the forms and adjectives always reveals a well dedicated work and shows a good attempt at the presentation of the elements, the tale suddenly falls in a heavy use of rethoric (an excerpt: ''It had been difficult to make his way to Chernobyl from the outskirts of the rift; patrols of military stalkers and packs of Zone creatures became common enough to make stealth an urgent requisite for survival. He avoided the soldiers at all costs; alone, he could never match their numbers, training, and equipment. Zombies and the freakish telepaths that commanded those emptied shells of flesh occupied many of the burnt-out hulks of buildings that dotted the landscapes. Joshua took care to always aim for their heads. He was certain that any shred of humanity those ghouls still possessed could only pray for a quick end to their wretched existence. Their listless, cloudy eyes made his trigger finger shrink away in disgust until the clip was empty. Every building was a wreck and no bed was secure, so Josh slung himself across the branches of trees at night. He didn't relish the prospect of being torn apart in his sleep by packs of rats, ordinary creatures that has been horribly transformed by the radiated winds that swept through the countryside. He traveled by night, tracing gullies and thick brush.'' - nothing is described more then the expected shown iin the screenshots, not anything shows up about any particular about characters, settings, events, dinamics regarding the life, and so on.).Thus making the events of the story and the character reaction pretty flat

1) killswitch - Very good story, I gave it a 9. The descriptions of each event taking place in the story were great. Good work.
2) FreakaMan - Nice storry, it kind of holds you to the end. If you read it twice,some flaws might come up, but then again you're not Asimov (yet). I would like to add one flaw to the list, maybe it helps you for part 2, the fact that the helicopter just plunged in the gravity well, I expected it to have enough tech to detect this kind of things, after all even josh knows about this anomaly, it's safe to say the military does. Also abou the presence of the miliary, if in that laboratory took place experiments on humans, it would have been cleaned long before josh heard about the zone, no government would risk something like that reach the public opinion.



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