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  22:30:59  11 December 2012
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PCDania
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Who said anything about shooting you? Now, get back to your room and start typing, okay?
  20:45:31  11 December 2012
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Bladewraith
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Yeah, you better get back to rewriting AND writing, you hear?
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Will do, i've finished chapters 1,2 and 5, so only 3 and 4 to go, both of which i've already half rewritten, so providing work don't bother me too much i should be finished the first five chapters in a few days, so i'm hoping to post the new Chapter 1 on Monday if possible, don't shoot me if i don't, so check back then.
  18:44:13  11 December 2012
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Yeah, you better get back to rewriting AND writing, you hear?
  13:24:43  11 December 2012
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Bladewraith
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I haven't checked up on this in a while, but I'm still very much interested.
As for me being in the story, do whatever you want.

Good luck. I'll be reading.
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Sound, I’ve finished the rewrite of Chapter's 1 & 2, some big changes in them, just to make the story... "Flow" better.

To give you an idea:
Chapter 01: Original=2082 Rewrite=4775
Chapter 02: Original=2246 Rewrite=Combined with chapter 3
Chapter 03: Original=1892 Rewrite=????
Chapter 04: Original=1839 Rewrite=Part Rewrite Complete
Chapter 05: Original=1659 Rewrite=Part Rewrite Complete
Chapter 06: Original=3243 Rewrite=5348 (Bunker)
I plan to make it up to at least the bunker before i post those first few chapters, as some of the biggest changes I have planned are in the post Bunker sections. as described, the bunker in chapter 6 will now appear in chapter 5, and I’ve tried to include more of everything, I’m hoping it isn't too much or the chapters don’t drag on, but I’ve actually got a sequel planned out, and that's where there was too many missing points from this story, so got annoyed and stopped. The sequel is a little bit grandiose to say the least, but it’s a story I’ve been trying to write for years and Bladewraith and Wingnut gave me the footing to do it properly

Anyway, enough babbling, best get on with the writing... err rewriting.
  07:06:12  10 December 2012
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DisabledDino
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I haven't checked up on this in a while, but I'm still very much interested.
As for me being in the story, do whatever you want.

Good luck. I'll be reading.
  12:36:34  15 November 2012
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Bladewraith
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Hello, this is a message to whomever may be interested, mainly Dino and money, i stopped writing the story a while back, i have every intention of finishing it, don't worry, but i had too many ideas that i wanted to put in, but couldn't because they need planting further back in the chapters that i've already posted, and a lot of glaring errors and typos that need fixing, so i've been editing the story from the very beginning, i plan on creating a new thread, under the Title "New Horizons: End of Exploration" which is my new working title.

The story is going to change a lot, the main story will remain, but things are going to change, if anyone featured is worried, im not going to kill you off, if you don't want to read it again, i understand so just hang on and once i've finished editing i'll continue to last few chapters, it'll still make sense (to a point) without reading the new additions. to give you an example, Chapter 1 originally had 2082 words, i'm about half way through adding to it and i'm up to 3448! if anyone has any ideas they want to throw in for chapters 1 and 2, let me know before i post the new version. i'll see if i can work them in

anyway, back to the rewrite
cheers
  09:24:02  1 September 2012
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DisabledDino
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Well damn! It's been a while, but I'm sure glad to see you.
I'm also happy I haven't died yet, but knowing my luck, it wouldn't be through enemy fire that I'd die. Most likely a friendly bullet gone way off or an accident with the propane heater while trying to make coffee.

Anyway, sorry it's been so long since I've commented, but as always, I really enjoyed it. Keep it up.
  12:25:13  19 August 2012
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D_Money
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Hellooooo!

Hey buddy,

Is the story still alive - keep it going!
  17:35:59  1 May 2012
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Bladewraith
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Hey, sorry about the delay, problems in the real world have had most of my time recently, hope this will keep any readers i have left happy, for a while at least

Chapter 27

Bladewraith, Wingnut, Tamara and Davis, didn’t bother to stay with forester, they needed information, why did they want Tamara, how did they know she was with them, and how did they no she was in the Zone at all. The jogged down the muddy paths of the Red Forest, boots splashed through puddles as drops of water thrown out catch in the pull of a Vortex and dragged out of sight; Tamara watched in fleeting amazement and proved how close to certain death they were coming. Wingnut led, watching closely and jumping off the path when blocked by a spiking Geiger Counter, or the beep of the anomaly detector. He missed nothing, within 20 minutes they approached the crumbling stone gateway leading out onto the old Limansk Road, there they stopped. Watching carefully, the old tunnel long since destroyed by an unknown force, the tower in front of them watched over the Bridge to Limansk, they were too late. The Mercs were nowhere in sight.
“Shit… they must’ve gone across already.” Remarked Wingnut
“Well there’s nothing we can do now” Replied Bladewraith
“Oh well… can we… at least rest… a bit please…” Tamara was out of breath; she gulped in air and fell to the floor in exhaustion, the trip to the Ranger Station, then straight through the forest to here without a rest had taken everything she had to keep up with the experienced Stalkers and Sergeant Davis.
“Ok fine, Davis, keep an eye on our rear, Wingnut Front… I’m gonna go check out the Bridge”

Bladewraith walked quickly across the road towards the lookout tower. Beyond that was the river that tomorrow would be the extraction point to get Tamara out of the Zone. The river gently flowed at a snail’s pace south beside the tower, Bladewraith cautiously peered round the corner out the tower to see across to the other shore and froze, he watched several figures patrolling north to south, travelling across their own footprints in tell tale Navy Blue BDUs and Black vests “More Mercs” he said to himself, another merc was watching the Red Forest side of the river from in front of the bridge control box; any sudden movement would grab his attention and alert him to an intruder. Bladewraith slowly moved back round the tower and out of sight of the Guards. He considered radioing Wingnut over, but didn’t want to risk the Merc’s intercepting the transmission, so he jogged back across the road, keeping the tower between him and the enemy presence.
“Mercs” he explained
Wingnut pulled Tamara and Davis behind the stone wall,
“Where?” asked Wingnut to which Bladewraith grinned
“On the other side of the river” he replied, Wingnut dropped his head and allowed Davis and Tamara to sit up once again.
“Come on…” the group stood up “I need you to stick to Wingnut ok” he explained to Tamara, who nodded in agreement. They all jogged across to the foot of the tower.
Bladewraith moved up the metal staircase and checked out the higher floor, it was empty and he used the extra height to get a better view of the Mercs on the other shore. He kept himself low to avoid being spotted and used his scope to view each target closely, none of them acted as if they’d spotted him, two patrolled the shoreline, one stood watching the opposite shoreline and a couple were sat chatting beside a fire, but they were too distant to know what they were discussing, he carefully moved back down to speak with the others.
“5 of them, AKs, M4s… and… a Remington…They don’t look like they’ve seen us.” Explained Bladewraith, Wingnut’s ears piped up a little, but didn’t question any further, he knew there was no way to see if it was his, from that distance.
“Good, I say we just avoid them all together and keep heading south.” Added Davis
“We can’t” replied Wingnut, and Bladewraith nodded, “This is the extraction point”
“What?” exclaimed Tamara and Davis in unison.
“Yup, in a little over 16 hours a boat will travel up the river and meet us less than a hundred metres over there” gloated Wingnut pointing past the tower.
“Look all we have to do, is wait, when the boat comes up it’ll distract the mercs and allow us to take them out, we get on the boat, long before reinforcements arrive and jobs done.” Explained Davis in a very matter of fact way.
“We can’t do that… can we?” shyly asked Tamara
“Actually, it’s not that bad an idea… we’ll have to act quickly, but it might just work” replied Bladewraith
“Can’t we at least warn the rescue team?” enquired Tamara
“Can’t risk giving our position away if they detect the radio chatter.” Advised Davis
“It’s gonna be dark in a few hours, whatever happens we need somewhere to sleep”
“In the tunnel, go down far enough, providing its radiation free, it should mask any light and keep us safe from the weather.” Wingnut explained. They turned towards the tunnel, and suddenly faint commotion reached their ears, Bladewraith carefully peered round the tower to inspect the uproar. What he saw made him react instantly,
“Davis Stay there, cover Doc… Wingnut come here, move… now!”
What is it, Wingnut checked round tower as well as Bladewraith, six Stalkers we’re being marched to the concrete edge of the river, two of the Stalkers wore Duty uniforms, another Freedom, and the final three were dressed in sunrise suits, all of their suits were bloodied in different places, at least two of them had bullet wounds that didn’t look dressed.
Wingnut jumped back
“What the hell?”
“We can’t let anything happen to those Stalkers” explained Bladewraith
“Agreed!”
Bladewraith looked through his scope and inspected the Stalkers and Mercs alike
“Bladewraith, Our mission is to get the Doc out of the Zone” commented Davis
“Forget about that for minute will ya?” exclaimed Wingnut
“Shit!” Bladewraith could easily see who a few of the prisoners were “Petrenko, Cold, Dania and Dino, what the fuck are those guys doing here?” he watched as several of the mercs turned and left through the tunnel they’d come from. It left the original five plus two more with the prisoners. Bladewraith quickly but covertly move up the steel stairs and took aim on the mercs closest to the prisoners, Davis shook his head and moved to the other side of the Tower and took aim also.
“I’ve got the left, you take right, fire on my command”
“Got it” was the simple but precise response. Wingnut still wasn’t sure about his new rifle; he hadn’t had any time to scope it in, ‘just have to aim for body mass’ he thought to himself. They both watched as the mercs lined the prisoners up by the edge, they seemed to speak to the prisoners, and pointing at the river. They were giving them the choice of jumping, and letting the toxic waste and radiation kill them, or take a bullet and fall in anyway. None of them choose the former. The mercs by the fire had put their feet up to watch the show, and the other decided to stop patrolling and watch also, only the one watching the shoreline inhabited by the three would be ambushers stayed vigilant,
“Wingnut, take the Stationary guard, then move to the patrollers, Davis take the left executioner and the two sat down, I’ll take the right then any you two don’t get to first… fire on my command”

“Now!” CRACK CRACK, a double tap of 7.62 ripped into the neck and skull of the Merc executioner on the right, two 5.56 rounds followed into the chest of the left, knocking him down, a short burst of 5.56 tore into the guard on watch, the body slumped to the ground leaving the bridge controls splattered in blood. The Freedom Prisoner reacted quickly and lunged forward at the closest merc only to receive a shotgun blast to the stomach, the force throwing him backwards into the river, the other prisoners dropped to the floor. Another round from Bladewraith’s 417 burst through the jaw of the left executioner as he tried to get back up, the two mercs by the camp fire had quickly jumped up suddenly realising what was going on and returned fire randomly across the river, watching from muzzle flashes and smoke and adjusting their fire accordingly, as a few rounds chipped the rock beside Bladewraith and Davis, the second patrolling merc received a burst from Wingnut from thigh to chest, and Davis shot into another as the last two dove for cover behind some old wooden crates. The prisoners kept down avoiding drawing fire, except Dino who ran over to the control box and grabbed the M4 off the metal grating and manically unloaded a magazine into the wooden crates…

Bladewraith and Davis stayed motionless for several long moments, Petrenko grabbed an AK, and moved over to the boxes, a quick glance round the side and he stood calmly, the other survivors got to their feet and checked each merc to make sure they were dead. Eventually Petrenko put his hand into the air
“Clear” spoke Wingnut calmly
“You guys ok?” Bladewraith asked Tamara, Wingnut and Davis, before standing and quickly running across the bridge, still keeping his eyes peeled in case any more mercs came to inspect the commotion, he hoped they would assume it was the prisoner’s executions. Wingnut stayed behind to cover Bladewraith as he crossed the bridge should any more Mercs present themselves
“You lot ok?” he asked the five remaining prisoners?
“Yeah” came from four of the them
“No!” came from Petrenko “I just lost my squad, except for the corporal here, of course I’m not ok… but I’m not hit at least, if that’s what you mean?”
“It is”
Bladewraith looked over to Dino, the shivering mess he’d been in Rostock had been replaced by a much more composed Stalker, people have to learn fast in the Zone, and he’d done just that.
“Good work Dino” Dania patted a stunned Dino on the back, as Bladewraith turned to address all three of them
“What are you guys doing here anyway, I thought you were going to Zaton” asked Bladewraith
“We did, when we got there, these fuckers laid an ambush for us… they knew we were coming!” replied Cold
“What did they want with you?”
“Well… they wanted information about you lot”
“What… Why”
“Something about that chick you’re escorting around?”
“Right… I’ll explain tomorrow…” said Bladewraith “Sorry” to this they looked a little put off but let the matter drop.
“And what about you, what happened” he addressed Petrenko
“we got into the heart of Limansk, with no resistance, we were beginning to believe our intel might have been wrong when we got ambushed, only one Freedom made out alive, but” Petrenko looked into the river “he is not now, me and the corporal, got knock down and captured…” it was obvious Petrenko was ashamed about this “when we not tell them anything useful about duty defence, they take us out here for death!”
“You reckon, there’s a mole in Duty?”
“Never! Must have been Freedom Mole…” Petrenko didn’t like the accusation “Fucking freedom Scum!”
“Hey, that’s enough, it could’ve been Freedom, but it could just as easily been Duty, or a free Stalker for all we know.” Petrenko stayed silent while trying to work it all out.
“I wanna find out what the Mercs are up to” came a voice from behind, Bladewraith turned to see Wingnut standing behind him, holding his Remington. “At least I got her back” he explained while gently caressing the length of the barrel.
“I must go back to Rostock and explain what happened, see if I can found out who mole is” explained Petrenko
“Ok… right, guys can you look after Doc and Davis, they’re on the other side of the bridge, me and Wingnut are going into Limansk” Dania and Dino nodded their agreement and Cold stepped forward “That’s fine, but I’m going with you”

End of Chapter
  07:52:42  21 April 2012
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D_Money
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Bladewraith you still keeping this story going? You have readers that are still eagerly awaiting your chapters broham!
 
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